The Question That Should Have Been Asked...

LOL, I like JoOngle's version I can literally imagine this dialogue between Ray and Mark and maybe even Art interfering and agreeing with Mark all the time.

Kris, since the movie plays in the present with all that cell phone stuff and internet going on, it still might somehow be hard to imagine they can't just contact someone, even after a storm. Back in the 80's this might have been a credible scenario but I don't know if it is for 2014, too?
 
<span class="postlistquotedtext"><blockquote>quote:<center><hr width="100%"/></center>RayPeterson wrote:

Kris, since the movie plays in the present with all that cell phone stuff and internet going on, it still might somehow be hard to imagine they can't just contact someone, even after a storm. Back in the 80's this might have been a credible scenario but I don't know if it is for 2014, too?

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The only way might be if the film takes place in real time, over about 90 minutes. So the police are called as the first kid goes missing, but a storm delays the arrival of the police. So the 3 guys get impatient and start snooping around themselves...
 
Or better yet, lighting or wind could take out the cell phone tower, so then there'd be no service.
 
Realtime sounds good.

Hah, what about this: Art has tried again to cut the power supply line because the priest and his family also have an electric fence. However, Art managed to cut the line which supplies the whole town with electricity...hmmmm.
 
<span class="postlistquotedtext"><blockquote>quote:<center><hr width="100%"/></center>RayPeterson wrote:

Realtime sounds good.

Hah, what about this: Art has tried again to cut the power supply line because the priest and his family also have an electric fence. However, Art managed to cut the line which supplies the whole town with electricity...hmmmm.<center><hr width="100%"/></center></blockquote></span>

Ray: Remember what happened last time, Art?
Art: Yeah, yeah, I know what I'm doing. *cut *zap
 
Since this is all imaginary and will never take place anyway, I might as well continue on parts of the script:

Ray walks over, irritated with Mark Rumsfelds intention to create a small army out of the neighbors to retrieve the kids, to his wife Carol.

Ray: I can't believe those nutcases, bad enough that we used to live next door to this crazy armsdealer, now he's firing up everyone to go on a crazy mission to save the kids, look he got DAVE in on it too!

Carol: Glad you came to your senses honey, now just call the cops!

(Dave comes rushing in):

Dave: DAD! DAD! Don't, Mark has got this covered, he used to serve in the military...

(Ray interrupts Dave):

Ray: Oh, he used to serve in the military?! (rolls eyes).

Dave: You don't get it dad - MY SON is involved, and this isn't like the Klopeks at our old street...and...

Ray: Listen son, I love you like no one else on this planet, but...

Dave: DAD, I DON'T CARE, I'm going to get my son NOW!

(Dave rushes off to Rumsfeld and Mark)

Carol: Did you call the cops Honey?
Ray: I was going to but...
Carol: Oh no...I knew this was going to happen...
Ray: What was going to happen, Carol...WHAT?!
Carol: You, and that crazy armsdealer are taking things into your own hands again, like last time it's going to...
Ray: Carol, CAROL - Listen...
Carol: Listen to yourself, if you're anything like the man I married you'll take charge NOW and...

(Ray runs out to the main living room, spying on Mark, Art & Dave outside..., opens the window halfway, ducks to avoid being spotted)

Art: Got everything we need? I brought sandwiches, beer...and I know you like Alphabet cookies Mark so...
Mark: Good work soldier, here...Dave, take the night vision goggles, you to Art, here's a pair for you.
Dave: How about weapons, any guns?
Mark: Good thinking, but no, when I served back in south Asia, there where only a few survivors, so I'll handle the guns!
Art: I have my own gun right here...
Mark: That pellet gun?!
(Shows a huge Sniper Rifle)
Mark: Now THATs a GUN!
(Art whistles (woooahh!)).

Rumsfeld military music (the soldiers walk) plays...
Zooming out of the scene, over to the old priest house.


 
Dude, you should totally become a screenwirter, I can virtually see the characters interacting with each other in front of my eye.
 
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